https://youtu.be/yyM7fHvKXXY
My video is based off a time where I was mentally scarred from my grandfather choking on a piece of steak. For the whole summer, I would not eat anything but Jell-O and peanut butter crackers. I would lay on my living room couch and deteriorate for almost 3 months. After awhile, I had to visit the doctor and was told that I needed to eat again. Somehow, his advice worked and I went back to my regular eating habits. I was 11 years old when this happened.
I enjoyed the text you used because it was consistent and helped move the plot along. Your brief use of sound was strong and carried your fear out to the viewer. However, the video felt fast and it may have benefitted from a few more frames depicting how this event effected your wellbeing back at home. You mentioned how you were fearful for 3 months so maybe incorporating a scene where you were at the dinner table while your parents ate dinner and you just ate jell-o.
ReplyDeleteI like that your style of animation was consistent thorough the video, and the black and white color scheme conveyed the mood, especially in the “Panic!” frame. I was really impressed that you captured the texture of the food so well in a black and white line drawing. I think one thing that could improve the piece would be to show the passage of time more overtly — you can tell that it takes place over a long period of time by the frames where you get thinner, but it could be even more effective if you made more references to the passage of time. The drawing of the doctor is a little weird. It seems a little stretched compared to the rest of the drawings.
ReplyDeleteI like that your style of animation was consistent thorough the video, and the black and white color scheme conveyed the mood, especially in the “Panic!” frame. I was really impressed that you captured the texture of the food so well in a black and white line drawing. I think one thing that could improve the piece would be to show the passage of time more overtly — you can tell that it takes place over a long period of time by the frames where you get thinner, but it could be even more effective if you made more references to the passage of time. The drawing of the doctor is a little weird. It seems a little stretched compared to the rest of the drawings.
ReplyDeleteThis is a really strong storyline and concept and I really liked your use of sound. Also the drawings are very well done, and I think you represented the sequence of events well. I would only suggest adding a few more frames towards the end just to slow down the events a little because the ending is important to the viewer to tell us that you were able to overcome your fear of choking. Also, showing that the event in the video happened over a long period of time would be helpful. Overall great job!
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